Sunday, March 22, 2009

Queering Developmental Education


For those of you who are familiar with Queer Theory, you will understand what I mean when I say that Dev Ed students are coming into our classes in closets.

The following post will be in reference to Basic Writers, but the theory is applicable to all disciplines.

Closetedness is a state of being brought on by the stereotypes of the observer and the observed. I feel that both students and instructors are unaware of these closets, yet students are being asked to "come out" without really understanding what got them there in the first place. The nature of closetedness, as I’ve come to understand it, is extremely versatile and really has no specific definition. The following quote by Eve Kosofsky Sedgwick I think explains this elusive quality the most effectively:
Even at an individual level, there are remarkably few of even the most openly gay people who are not deliberately in the closet with someone personally or economically or institutionally important to them. Furthermore, the deadly elasticity of heterosexist presumption means that, like Wendy in Peter Pan, people find new walls springing up around them even when they drowse: every encounter with a new class full of students, to say nothing of a new boss, social worker, loan officer, landlord, doctor, erects new closets whose fraught and characteristic laws of optics and physics exact from at least gay people new surveys, new calculations, new draughts and requisitions of secrecy or disclosure. The gay closet is not only a gay feature of the lives of gay people. But for many gay people it is still the fundamental feature of social life; and there can be few gay people, however courageous and forthright by habit, however fortunate in the support of their immediate communities, in whose lives the closet is still not a shaping presence. (67-68)
What this means is that even though students have been outed as Dev Ed (be it by themselves, their instructors, or their test scores) this is not a serve-all diagnosis that would allow facilitators the freedom or confidence for a fix-all prescription. The issues that lead (or drag) students into Developmental Education are as unique as the students themselves. In order to address the needs of our students, we must address their closets.

The closet has both an interior and exterior space. The exterior, which actually calls for the interior, is constructed by the subjective stereotypes of the observer (in our students' case, their instructors). The closet is the tag an observer places on the observed to categorize a stereotype. The tag of Basic Writer implies a stereotype. What makes these students basic? How one perceives what is basic about a writer changes from one observer to the next and more importantly from one writer to the next.

It is in the privacy of the interior of this basic closet that a writer learns how to define themselves as a writer. What we must do is eliminate the need for closetedness so that this self-definition of the student, although still very personal, becomes public. While confined within this interior space, the observed (the basic writer) is actually no different than the oppressed discussed by Paolo Freire. When our students can make their interior space public, they can then begin to constructively create their own language, define themselves, and tear down their own closets. I think it is important to note here that it is ultimately the duty of our students, not us, to remove their own barriers.

In an attempt to help my students make the interior of their closets public, I asked my two sections of Basic English to answer the following question:

What makes a writer a Basic Writer?

Below are their unedited responses. What you'll notice are that very few of the responses address the same needs and that in more cases than not, the answers are a bit ambiguous. After reading these self-definitions I had to really ask myself if my students knew why they were in Basic Writing. If they don't know why they're there, how are they expected to get out?

Student Responses

A basic writer is a person who doesn’t really understand the meaning of basic sentencing. This makes he/she basic writer’s because they can’t understand a thesis or know how to even stay on there topic when writing.

Knowing ever thing about writing. Where the punctuation go. How there spelling is.

Well a basic writer is someone that may not know a lot about basic writing like grammar, writing, and so on. Myself I ain’t the best writer.

I think because you might not have the skills.

I think what makes a writer a basic writer is the ability of the writer to write according to his lecturer’s instructions. I could write more.

I think a basic writer is someone doesnt give a full description and or not use enough detail.

I think a writer is a basic writer because we don’t have that much knowledge for writing right now.

I think to be a basic writer is someone that has difficulty putting essays together, such as not knowing when to stop a sentence and not make a runon. Also how to start off a essay with the intro and get a topic sentence and thesis. And they wouldn’t know to put the whole essay together and giving a good concluding paragraph, body, and intro.

A basic writer is someone who can write but there missing things like comma splices. Also the can’t spell that well eather. A basic writer doesn’t have the same skills as a writer in a book would. Well they do they just can’t or don’t know how to use the skills to write a easy.

A basic writer is someone who doesn’t explain his or herself or use examples when writing. A basic writer also doesn’t know how to put their thoughts and ideas into words and explain themselves better.

Well if you ask me a basic writer is someone who give basic information. They are individuals who give thought to just a couple of ideas for their sentences.

What makes me a basic writer is that I don’t know that much about writing and sometime I don’t spell it right.

My opinion about what makes a writer a basic writer, is a write the hasn’t perfect his way of writing but is good the is a basic writer because he know the basis of writing.

I want to make a writer a basic writer because I want to improve my written English and for my point is when I write sometimes y very important in the several communications I want to effort.

It makes it a basic writer because of the fact he hasn’t gotten to the point of writing with strong words, maybe they don’t understand what they are writing.

A basic writer is a person who has the skill to write but doesn’t use all the rules. Like a person may know how to write but writes with run on sentences of less punctuations. Its like you know what you write to write and how is the problem.

A basic writer is someone who knows the fundamentals of writer but needs help on some aspects. For example putting their main ideas on paper and in order. Also how to develop a thesis statement.

I think that we have some skills but not the skills needed to take the other class. I also think that the skills need to be improved.

I think a basic writer is a basic writer due to inexperience with writing.

A basic writer, is someone who if you if you give them a topic the can write about a topic, but they don’t know exactly what they are writing about. A basic writer is somebody who can write pretty well but the have a couple of errors here and there.

I think that what makes a writer a basic writer is anything that holds a writer back from fully expressing him or her self full thoughts in their essays and papers. A basic writer is some who maybe just can’t write their feelings on paper.

Being a basic writer you need to understand the basic steps on how to write. Fragmenting sentences is my weakness and the proper punctuation. When writing a paper I tend to go ahead I need help staying in the no, and with fragmenting and punctuation.

Spelling, grammar, structure of sentences, staying on topic, not jumping around.

Has lots of work to improve on. From spelling, subjects, capitalization, and more. A writer needs make since when writing about something. Needs to understand what he is writing about and how he wants to present it.

I think I’m here to learn how to write better essays.

The establishment of knowing how to make his/her main idea and point of view meaningful. Understanding what their writing.

What makes a writer a basic writer is the way a writer writes in a motion to what he or she is feeling and putting does feelings in a paragraph or sentences.

When your grammar and sentence structure is not as refined as it should be. When you should focus on main ideas and really don’t know how to.

The photo for this post is of me with one of my former GED classes. I chose to use this particular photo because I felt that these students truly fit into this paradigm of closetedness.

Wednesday, December 24, 2008

Essays (Introductions)

The following lesson was designed to help my students understand how an introduction performs and why the performance is necessary. All of the information below was created by my two classes; all I did was provide the questions and they did the rest.

I began the class by providing my students with four introductions from random essays. The sources of these introductions is completely arbitrary; I personally chose samples from both student and professional essays. I broke the class into four equal groups and than asked them to read the introductions and choose the introductions they liked most and least. After each group localized their choices, they were asked to write on the chalk board two qualities each paragraph possessed that influenced their decision (some ideas were repeated, which was fine).

I wrote down the lists from both classes, typed them on to one document, and distributed them during the following class so the students could use them for future reference.
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ENGL020
Fall 2008

Checklist for Writing an Effective Introduction

An effective introduction possesses the following characteristics:
-It grabs the reader’s attention
-The first three sentences are crisp and effective
-It is personal (makes the connection between the writer and the topic)
-It arouses questions (engages the reader)
-The issue of the essay is clear
-The issue is relevant
-The writer’s position is made with examples and details
-It flows (uses smooth transitions)
-It’s easy to follow
-The information is useful

An ineffective introduction does one or more of the following:
-Presents too much information too soon
-Blunt
-Repetitive (be it with words or phrases)
-Too few details
-Doesn’t flow
-Confusing
-Dull
-Bad transitions (choppy)
-Uses questionable sources
-Comes out of nowhere (fails to express relevance)
-Hard to follow
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After the students created the list, I projected the image of Martin Luther King that is at at the top of this post onto the screen at the front of the room. I then played his speech Keep Moving (thanks Dan) that he gave in Birmingham.
Note: Both the image and speech I found on a blog I read called Born to be Nervous. I'm always amazed, but never surprised, at the useful materials I find on the blogosphere. I think it's important that we find ways to incorporate both technology and culture into our classrooms and blogs are a fantastic resource that satisfy these needs on all levels.
I asked the students, as a class, to first explain the main issue of the speech and then, with their groups, to write an introduction for that issue using the guidelines they created earlier. To provoke an inspired effort, I told each class (I have two) that the other class would vote on the most effective introduction and the winning group in each class would receive extra credit.

These were the introductions from each class, exactly as they were written:

ENGL020-02
Fall 2008
Group Introductions

(1) The topic at hand is freedom freedom. By saying freedom freedom we mean that we are still fighting a war of wanting to be free in a society where freedom is not always allowed. In Dr. King’s speech he tells us to keep on moving and till this day we are still fighting for equality and freedom.
By electing an African American for president we have become one step closer to equality. Because of Dr. King’s speech Obama may have been influenced to run for president. Not only has Dr. King influenced just Obama to keeping on freedom for his rights, but he’s also influenced the whole nation to keep fighting for their dreams and what they feel is right.

(2) People had fought for their freedom in all possible ways. Some cried and some die for it. The dark pages of the book of life continue to an unknown end. Even today freedom is a big issue that has to be address. A lot of families have been carrying with this pain for a long time, and their faith is what kept them alive.
Martin Luther King Jr. is a legend and a hero that fought for our freedom and human dignity. He believed that we were all equal do not matter the race, color, background etc. One of his famous quotes was “If you cannot fly, run; if you cannot run, walk; but at least keep moving.” Life continues and we have to take the most of it. Many people were arrested for defending their rights and now because of the effort of this amazing legend, United States have changed.

(3) Who said life was going to be easy? With the many issues we face today and faced in the past I don’t think that question will ever be true. Till this day we face racism. It’s just hard for certain people to accept other from different race having equal opportunity. But that’s not the only issue we face. How abut freedom, or human dignity. It’s stressful, knowing that our country still struggles in being untitled no matter the race for color of your skin. But thanks to idols in the past that help us move on up one step closer to be dream of our country being free from racism. You know who I am talking Dr. King. He stresses all the issues we face today in is speech of just keep moving.
The fight for equality and freedom never felt so strong since Obama has become president. This election was a very extreme and exciting. I believe that change is coming and for the good. Because of who Obama is and where he grew up at, it’s what makes him a good person. He targets all the young and college education people.

(4) People in our society today are racists and segregate against others. There are still issues today with equality between races. For example , judgement due to color of others skin. In the 50's and 60's , blacks and white's where seperated in many areas of life. now being 2008, equality has come a long way, still leaving stubborn people who belive in seperation between races.
In work places today, many colored people are mistreated, they look at you like you dont belong on this earth, which is not fair at all. Sometimes, its harder for black males to get a job. However, in the streets colored people and also, spanish people are not treated right they get pulled over for no reason at all, and if they do get pulled over for a reason its for something stupid.
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ENGL020-04
Fall 2008
Group Introductions

(1)
Just Keep Swimming
In the movie Finding Nemo Dori once said “Just keep swimming”. I am sure we are all pretty familiar with this film. What Dori means is when you are going through a dark time, don’t be afraid and keep moving ahead and you will eventually find the light at the end of the tunnel. It may take a little hard work to achieve what you want, but don’t ever give up on any of your goals in life. If you work hard now you will be able to play harder later.
In the movie Finding Nemo there were many moments of dark times. For instance when Nemo tried to escape the fish tank he failed several times. Then he tried again and he never gave up in hopes of finding his father. That little fish had never gave up on his freedom and never stopped swimming and neither should we. So just remember to “Just keep swimming”.

(2) In the year 2008 people still have to fight for there freedom. you would believe after all the martins and malcoms speeches americans would be the land of the free. people still go through rascim and injustice. Many people in america today have familes that they are responsable of, and are still losing their jobs. People today should stand up for what they believe in and still continue to fight for their rights.
Are position on this we have been fighting for freedom for to long now. we have made alot of progress in the world but are fully there. Every new generation is fighting more and more to better are freedom. I think if we keep trying to come together as one freedom will come to us and we can move on to the next issue.

(3) Have you ever been insulted by a racial comment or action? Well I have being a person of color I've been. One day I was on my way to the store to meet up with some friends. Before I could get to the store, I had to cross a busy intersection. After I looked both ways and procided to enter the street. A truck came speeding down the road as I tried to hurry across to the other side, the truck cut me off. The man in the window yelled out to me as he passed. The word cut me to the bone, he had called me the n- word and spat at me. I was devistated by his comment and his rebel flag as it passed out of sight.
The reason why we think racism is wrong is because interfires with human rights. The bursness of racism is to offend anothe inferior. Racism needs to die, we need to figure a way to stamp it out. Prejudgement that pleages us as a people. Racism starts at home with adults teaching their young children that color is a big deal. We need to change the way the older rasist think help them to understand that we are all humans not seperated by color of our skin or in anyway. We all eat, sleep, and breath. Stop comiting our future generations to the same fate as today. We all have the power to change and together we can erase the racism.

(4) How do you define freedom? Most people go along with the amendment of the constitution as a freedom of speech, religious practice and have the liberty to do anything they would want at any given time. For centuries, human beings have fought for there freedom. To the beginning of time when human beings evolved, there have been many wars over freedom. For illustration, America fought there independence from Britain in the revolutionary war. Also, America had war with Iraq because Iraq threatened Americans freedom.
When someone takes away your freedom, the first thing they should do is stand up for them selves. As Martin Luther King said in his speech "Always keep on moving." He believed that people should stand for there rights and never give up in what they believe in. If you are right millions will raise behind you.

Wednesday, October 1, 2008

Illustrative Paragraph

Paragraph intro to come.

Narrative Paragraph

Paragraph intro to come.

The Descriptive Paragraph

Paragraph intro to come.

Teaching Paragraphs to Developmental Writers

I have taught developmental/basic writing at two community colleges. At both campuses the aim of the course was to help students develop the necessary skills to write a rhetorically effective essay. Each school, or at least the texts they required for the course, focused on paragraph development as the preliminary building blocks to academic writing. Not every colleague that I've conversed with agrees with the paragraph-first approach and I take this opportunity to invite all those opposed to please comment.

One fault that I have found with my current teaching of paragraphs is the text. At the moment I am using Real Writing: With Readings by Susan Anker and prior to this semester I was using Mosaics: Focusing on Paragraphs in Context by Kim Flachmann. While I have found both of these books helpful as an instructors resource, they do leave a great deal to be desired as a resource for students. The unfortunate fact of the matter is that all Basic English texts, to my knowledge, are static and leave little room for student mobility and manipulation. The problem isn't with what they say, but with what they don't say. I think we would all agree that no two schools share the same demographic. So what would lead us to believe that the basic writing needs of these students could possibly be viewed through a similar lens? (Oh boy, here I go.)

What I propose we try to accomplish with this section of the blog, is to accumulate as many lessons on paragraph writing as we can. Both of the texts I had mentioned earlier provide information for nine paragraph styles. I will create a label for each of these styles and any lesson you would like to submit will receive it's own post. Each post will be available for comments and then be categorized under its appropriate tag. What this will do is provide a bank of lessons, as diverse as our students, that will then be available to any educator or student who needs them. I suspect that this may be very helpful for instructors new to teaching Developmental/Basic Writing. Heavens knows I could have used it.

Kelly

Thursday, September 11, 2008

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